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Two shy eyes hide behind the blanket
in a manner that makes you think
of how small everything really is.

As if entranced they follow your every move
begging you to know, to feel, to look back
and blink at how small everything is.

A rhythmical swift motion, rapid movement,
sweeping dance; enchanting your puerile heart
and learning your every move

to a one-two-three beat, a sweet melody
of two shy blinking eyes, curious
of how small everything really is.
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NaPoWrimo 2009 - #28

Just a sweet little poem that I wrote on a whim.

16.8.09 - Edit:
I reread it and suddenly I realized, like a gong in the back of my head, what this poem is really all about. Sometimes you write something and you can't see what it says, what it means, only after a long while, after you let it really soak into you, grow on you, feed on your heart.
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beautiful :aww:
the repetition did it for me, such a lovely piece.
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`leoraigarath Aug 20, 2009  Professional Writer
I was really confused about this piece for a long while until I looked at it the other day, and things made sense. The repetition suddenly made sense. I'm really glad that you liked it, for me it means that I got it right this time. I really appreciate that you told me that. Thank you.
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~forWinds Apr 30, 2009  Student Writer
Teehee. Makes me curious. :giggle:
Great stuff!
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`leoraigarath May 3, 2009  Professional Writer
:nod: :thanks:
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`leoraigarath May 6, 2009  Professional Writer
:thanks:
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`LadyLincoln Apr 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed, a very sweet poem.

A lovely, lovely piece.

:heart:
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`leoraigarath May 4, 2009  Professional Writer
:blushes: Thank you... :hug:
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